Gangnam Style

horses
city
sauna
car
park
elevator
boats
dancing
hey sexy lady
stables/ barn
bathroom

My Post Secret Postcard

My audience for my Post Secret Postcard is anyone, male or female, who has to endure public speaking in their daily lives. Whether they feel the same way I do about public speaking, they still may be able to relate or maybe have another fear the goes along with public speaking. My design features in my postcard, is I made the whole postcard different shades of red to show the different shades of red that I get when I have to public speak. On the top of the postcard, I wrote text explaining what my secret. I wrote the last word of secret at the bottom right of the postcard to show people that I also have trouble studdering or finishing sentences when I have to public speak.

Peer Review: Paper 3

This peer review was very helpful because I was unsure if my paper was heading in the right direction.
After my partner read over it and gave me a few pointers and ideas to think about, I know I will be able to succeed the paper length requirement because of the additional information I will add. She told me to watch out for grammar, and the make sure I am confident in my writing or it will not be convincing. I am going to try to expand my information and make my facts specific and not so broad. Now that I have my research, I have a clear image of my spoof ad that correlates with the research correctly. The peer review we worked on today has worked best for me because it allows me to know what more to add to my paper and helps benefit my paper as a whole, rather than specific paragraphs in the paper.

Spoof Ad: McCruelty

This ad is clearly a spoof ad of how McDonald's prepares their food. You see the head of a dead cow that is covered in blood, which is red and one of McDonald's primary colors, and then on the right the colors are yellow, red, and black which also helps you recognize this is about McDonald's. This spoof ad is supposed to make you realize what really goes on behind the production of McDonald's Big Macs and the cruelty the poor animal goes through. The text is asking "Do you want fries with that?" and being paired with that picture of course you wouldn't want to eat fries with a head of a dead carcass. However, if this were a true McDonald's advertisement, there would be a juicy Big Mac with the same text, and yes, many would want fries with that. This ad wants people to realize that McDonald's is basically "cruelty to go." They are not concerned for people's health or the well being of animals, they just make intriguing advertisements to get customers money. If McDonald's ads truly looked like this, they would go out of business because it is unappealing, upsetting and unappetizing. This spoof ad's audience is mainly for vegetarians because of the text shown at the bottom.

In this advertisement for DKNY Jeans, there is a large image takes up two pages in the magazine. On the left side of this advertisement, there is a beautiful women being held by another gorgeous man walking our of a New York taxi. They are both wearing DKNY jeans along with other fashionable items of clothing. The couple seems as though they are dating and have a fabulous life. This advertisement gives you the feeling that if you are wearing DKNY jeans, than maybe you can look as fabulous as this models and find a man as well. The type of lifestyle this ad is promoting to would be young women or men in the 20's who are always on the go in a busy city and need clothes that could make them look nice while being casual. The ad portrays that even though these are casual jeans, they are easy to dress up or down for working women or men who are always in a hurry. Using a setting in New York City while having the models walking out of a taxi is what led me to believe that this is for young working men and women because NYC is known as a busy, working city for men and women around their 20's. Also there is text at the bottom of the ad telling me that this ad is promoting DKNY jeans and it takes place at Church & Leonard St. New York City.

Today is the day my career is officially beginning. Without your help teaching me the ropes behind law and providing me with this great internship, I would not be where I am today. Along with informing you about my incredible acceptance into Harvard Law school, I would also like to thank you for all you have done for me. Through your wise ways, I have learned so much about what it takes to be a lawyer and you helped reassure that this is the right career path for me. Even though you were my boss of an unpaid internship, you cared about me striving to be who I wanted to be. As you know, Harvard Law School was my first choice and I was very worried about not getting accepted. I have worked incredibly hard studying for LSAT and working while being a part-time student, and you were very understanding of me not always being able to attend my internship. Although my home life isn't so stable with divorced parents who care more about themselves than their own daughter's career, you pose as a father figure in my life because you always supported me and cared about my dreams and aspirations. You were the first person I thought of when I opened my acceptance letter to Harvard because I knew you would be just as excited and proud as I was. I am going to move into Boston in the fall and until then I am still gladly going to continue working for you and your company. Without your company, I would probably not be going to grad school and may or may not have a job after college. So once again, thank you for all that you have done for me and I hope to keep in touch while I am in Boston to tell you all that I have learned in Law school.


Today is the day my career is officially beginning. Without your help teaching me the ropes behind law and providing me with this great internship, I would not be where I am today. Along with informing you about my incredible acceptance into Harvard Law school, I would also like to thank you for all you have done for me. Through your wise ways, I have learned so much about what it takes to be a lawyer and you helped reassure this career is for me. Even though you were my boss of an unpaid internship, you cared about me striving to be who I wanted to be. As you know, Harvard Law School was my first choice and I was very worried about not getting accepted. I have worked incredibly hard studying for LSAT and working while being a part-time student, and you were very understanding of my busy schedule. Although my home life isn't so stable with selfish divorced parents, you have posed as a father figure in my life because you always supported me and cared about my dreams. You were the first person I thought of when I opened my acceptance letter to Harvard because I knew you would be just as excited and proud as I was. I am going to move into Boston in the fall and until then I am still gladly going to continue working for you and your company. Without your company, I would probably not be going to grad school and may or may not have a job after college. So once again, thank you for all that you have done for me and I hope to keep in touch to tell you all that I have learned in Law school.

Peer Review Reflection

While writing paper 2, I am feeling pretty confident about a few different things. I believe that choosing to analyze a magazine was a good decision because it is easy to provide good examples. Along with the many examples I  have provided, I have given good analysis to back them up. It is also a lot easier to be looking through the magazine and just write down how the text and visuals make me feel. I am going to  add a longer introduction in the beginning of my paper and include a couple more paragraphs at then end showing how the text and visuals work together. I will not change the examples I provided because I feel they do a good job of supporting my arguments.

Response to paper 2 feedback

As I look through my paper and see several sentences and paragraphs highlighted, I feel a little bit relieved knowing that some part of my paper makes sense. After reading the feedback I got, I completely see what she was talking about. I talk about 3 paragraphs to describe what Cosmopolitan magazine is all about and what it does rather than jumping into the main idea of the paper. Later in the paper I discuss how the cover is effective and what not and I will maybe move that part of the paper closer to the front to make my point and argument very clear and concise. I feel pretty confident with this paper because I have a detailed and good start to the paper and now I just have to continue to revise and edit it to make it perfect.

Starry Night Visual/ Textual Interpretation

Samantha Klein, Patrick Hahne 
By reading "The Starry Night" by Robert Fagles, we were able to interpret a different perspective on Van Gough's original painting through altered detail and additional opinions. Fagles adds his personal description on how he interprets the windy skies and the "cloudrack coiling". He also places himself into the painting by adding his emotional attachment to each detail. He claims that the painting or painting himself is a therapeutic way for releasing his madness. Through viewing the painting and reading the poem, each student interpreted a feeling of relaxation and tranquility, imagining oneself staring up at the dark and electric skies. Both the poem and painting create the same emotional release.

Discovery Draft: Paper 2

For this paper, I am going to take the approach of analyzing how the visual images and written text work together to produce a successful magazine such as Cosmopolitan. I am going to first discuss the visual images and what they try to prove. I analyze the color of the image, the actual image and the layout design of each page. I then go on to discuss the qualities of the written text and I analyze the voice, tone and audience of the magazine. I  chose this topic because analyzing a magazine seemed to be an easier approach because I can have the magazine sitting in front of me and there are many examples I can use to analyze it.
My peer asked me:
How are you going to begin your thesis/intro?
How do you relate to the magazine? Why do you keep reading it?

Awkward Family Photo Anaylsis

1. This photo contains what seems to be a loving family where a husband and a wife has two daughters. The father in this photo is shirtless, has his back turned to the camera, showing off his tatted back. The tattoos on his back are the faces of the 3 women in the picture, which I am assuming is his family. The youngest daughter in the image appears to be grabbing her fathers with a closed, innocent smile.
2. What draws my attention to the photograph is the fathers back. He is shirtless and tan and is the center of the photo. That automatically draws your attention to his 3 tattoos of the women in his life with a portrait of their face and their name above or below the tattoo.
3. This photograph portrays a long story because of the tattoos. It makes me wonder why they decided to have a family photo like this and it also makes you wonder what made the father get his back tatted with his family's faces and names on it. Was there a life threatening situation where he almost lose them? or was it just out of love.
4. Being a daughter and having siblings, influences my position of this photo. I think that the father getting his back tattooed of the ones he loves is a way to show his dedication to his family and also his attachment. I would be honored if my father did this because he would ruin his body to show is love. However, it almost seems as though the older daughter in this image is embarrassed of her family because of her smile.

FLAMINGOS CAUGHT MAKING A FLAMINGO

Intros and Conclusions

Strategies I am going to use to draw readers into my paper through the introduction is to begin with a hypothetical story. Reading the Music Television Mike introduction influenced me to completely do a turn around with my intro. My intro now is boring and not compelling to readers and just explains what I am going to discuss throughout my paper. I want to begin with a hypothetical situation about what would happen if I didn't watch T.V. as a child and what my life would be like then. I haven't thought about how I am going to begin this yet or what the situation will be, but I have faith I will come up with something magical. 

So that is how I am going to begin my paper but I'm still wondering how I will end it in a way that will leave readers thinking further. Referring back to The McGraw-Hill Handbook, I think I am going to summarize my main point and suggest some implications for the future. Basically explain what my paper focused on and how it will benefit me in the future and maybe future generations. 

Honestly, my conclusion now is a piece of crap that took me 3 minutes to write because I was too exhausted from writing 6 pages already. But now that I have a big chunk of my paper written, I can now focus on my intro and conclusion. My conclusion now just has some general, broad statements about T.V. and how it has shaped people. That clearly doesn't work so I now have a lot to work on to make my paper interesting and comprehendible. 

Being a Class Blogger

Yesterday, Wednesday, September 19, 2012 I was our class blogger for the day. I was supposed to be class blogger for class on Friday the 21, but unfortunately we do not have class that day so I figured I would get it out of the way yesterday. Since I didn't really know what the role of class blogger was intended to do, I just decided to wing it through the class. I took notes on everything that happened in class beginning from when Professor Lang took attendance to what our homework was for the following class. Since she went over a few powerpoint slides, I wrote down everything the power point slides said so no one would be behind in learning how to peer review a paper. All you basically do is summarize what went on in class and since I didn't have time in class to write the blog, I took my notes home and wrote it before the next day started. At the end I added a little link to a video that related to what we did in class, or you could add images as well. I enjoyed being the class blogger for the day because it helped me better understand what we learned that day in class. I know you all may think it is annoying but it is really not bad and is easy so don't fuss over it! It is better to know what you are doing in class rather than being completely clueless! So I hope you all enjoy being the class blogger as much as I did and I sure you all will do a great job!! :)

Class Blogger for the Day: 9/19

Like any other Monday, Wednesday or Friday in ENC1101, Professor Lang started the class off by taking attendance. Since she was a little late (happens to all of us) so she didn't have time to ask us an interesting question and we were all so eager to begin proof reading each others drafts. What we focused on the majority of the class was proof reading our peers drafts but we worked with someone who hasn't already read our paper. Before we split away with our partners, Professor Lang went through a few powerpoint slides that discussed global issues and higher order concerns. We learned that when doing peer review, you want to look at the global issues or issues that affect the paper as a whole, look at the thesis or focus, audience which is the teacher and peers and making sure it is appropriate. You want to also take a look at the purpose, organization, development of paragraphs and the point of view of the paper. Instead of just looking at what we should do, we went over a few things of what NOT to do. What you are NOT doing is you are not editing, you are just revising. We learned that revision is NOT rewording and avoiding repetition or fixing an error that does not affect other parts of the paper. You are also not working with local issues/ lower concerns (grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc.). You are looking critically at your own writing to determine: if it is really worth saying, if it says what you wanted to say, if a reader will understand what your are saying. We also went over what is peer review? She explained that it is objective feedback, having a fresh set of eyes is always a good thing and to be kind but honest while peer reviewing. After this we went over briefly the when and the why of peer review, to learn to look at your own writing in a different way.

Then we finally broke off with our partners and began reading through each others essays. We were told to underline  passages that we thought were strong, draw a squiggly line under passages you thought were weak or confusing and leave comments and recommended revisions along the way. After you finished proof reading, we were told to get out a separate sheet of paper and quickly answer the following questions. 

1. Consider what the assignment is asking you to do. Is this essay fulfilling those requirements? Why or why not?

2. What is working well in the essay? Explain why they are working well.

3. How is the organization of the essay working? What changes might you recommend?

After we read and answered those questions on a separate sheet of paper, we then discussed with our partner what our comments meant and how we felt about their paper. And finally as the class came to an unfortunate end, as always we blogged the last 5 minutes about what we thought went well, what did not go well and what will you change or won't change about your paper. Since we don't have class this Friday the 21, our homework for Monday the 24 is to read McGraw Hill Handbook, intros and conclusions and bring the handbook to class. Also because we didn't use the second copy of our draft in class make sure you bring it to class on Monday. 

I hope I was able to give a good brief description of class today!! Here is a fun link about why proof reading papers is important...ENJOY!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p_rwB5_3PQc

Peer Review 2

While peer reviewing, I learned a few things about my paper that went well and didn't go well. My partner told me that I had some good examples and good summaries of the television shows, however I needed to add a few more in other sections. My ending to my paper is a little weak and I needed to discuss more of the good values I learned about watching the Kardashians. I am going to add a paragraph or two at the end just summarizing up all of the shows I watching and how it shaped me to be who I am today. I won't change some of my stronger points in the paper and I will leave all of my summaries the way they are.

Feedback

As I review the feedback on my second rough draft, I am finally getting a clear understanding of what this paper is asking for how to properly analyze it. What we discussed in class today was that we shouldn't give a broad comparison of two different genres with different audiences and as I look back at my paper and the feedback given to me, I did exactly that. I realized when I was rereading the paragraph where I summarized Keeping up with the Kardashians that I somehow compared it to Little Bear and the shows I watched when I was younger and that just doesn't make sense. I need to think about who is the audience for the Kardashians, what it means and how this show specifically changed my perspective of the world. And basically in my conclusion, instead of giving big claims that are broad and compare different genres and audiences, I need to tie together how each television show changed my view of the world and not how media has changed because only my taste in T.V. has. All of the feedback that I received was very helpful and overall I need to change the way I analyzed each show and instead just discuss how it made me feel and not others. Not only was the feedback very helpful but the activity we did in class made me understand how to analyze a show and the steps it takes to do so.

Discovery Draft Review

This discovery draft really allowed me to get all my thoughts I had about this paper and just simply write it out in an unorganized manner. I am writing a television show narrative that shows the difference in the television shows I watched as a little girl to what I watch now. I began by discussing how watching Little Bear as a young girl made me feel and what I learned from it, then discussed how watching Hannah Montana as a teenager was relatable to my life then and then how Keeping up with the Kardashians is taking over pop culture and teaching invaluable lessons. My goal for this paper is to show how much my taste in television has evolved throughout my life and it shows what people really care about watching in their spare time. Working with my group member was very helpful because we were both in the same position where we were concerned our paper wasn't going in the right direction but after reading each others paper we realized what was missing and figured out ways to make them better. In my next draft, I am going to have a more organized and structured paper that does not have bullets or notes on it. I will include more analysis about the way the television shows affected me growing up and how it made me perceive the world as I know it.

John Wayne's: A Love Song

Didion learned from watching John Wayne and his films that women seemed to be ignored. As we saw in the trailer, the character Mary, played by Martha Hyer, tried to stop an Elder brother from getting into danger and causing violence, but he did not seem to listen anyway. After reading Didion's essay and watching the trailer of the 'Sons of Katie Elder', Didion learns what it means to be a man and what there role is. She has always seen John Wayne as "driving cattle up from Texas, and bringing airplanes in on a single engine", and looked up to him as an adventurous, daring man.

Growing up in the 90's, music was very popular. Particularly the Spice Girls in my case. My sister, best friend and I would obsess over all of their songs and play dress up and pretend we were them performing concerts for thousands of people. The Spice Girls was about the only all girl band I really knew about at the time and I thought they were unstoppable. I felt when I would dress up as Baby Spice or Scary Spice, people would look at me as unstoppable. To this day, I still own their CD's, have been to their reunion concert several times and still continue reenacting some songs with friends. 

What I thought about Anne Lamot's "Shitty First Drafts"

Anne Lamot's essay "Shitty First Drafts" made me some what relieved about the way I write. Starting any type of essay has always been a struggle to me and I get beyond frustrated when I write a "shitty first draft". However, after reading this essay, I am relieved to know that I do not stand alone when it comes to starting essays or writing first drafts.  Everything Lamot said about how it is impossible to write a perfect first draft made perfect sense and I am definitely going to keep her advice in the back of my head when I am sitting at my desk pulling my hair out while trying to write my first draft.

My writing style is very interesting and somewhat jumbled. Writing has never been my strong suit so I definitely struggle a little bit. The first thing I do when given a prompt is construct my thesis and the areas of support that back my thesis up. Once I have my areas of support written down somewhere I look for textual evidence or I cite examples for each area of support. This way works best for me because having all of the examples for my essay in front of me before starting my essay helps it be organized and well developed. Once I have all of the necessities to start an essay, I sit down in front of my computer, stare at the screen for about 30 minutes, get a little distracted then start writing my intro. As soon as my intro is done, things begin to come to me a lot easier because I am in the mood to write. I normally write the essay in one sitting and then go back and look for errors and change some sentences around to make it sound perfect.

Writing is a storm for me. I can never accurately see the outcome of a paper and it is never predictable. My writing could be very painful to read or it is barely harmful and could end up being peaceful.